Kav's Tips for Comic Artists - Revisions
by A. "Kav" Kaviraj
Comic book artist, A. Kaviraj, continues his op/ed series of providing useful tutorials for comic book artists.
Okay, first off is page 10 from Rapid City #5. Maxwell Murder has chased a hoodlum into an apartment building. Josh pointed out that panel 5 had problems-the perspective was somewhat screwy and it lacked drama. So I switched to a close up face to face panel. Much better. I used the Avery security half page labels-not the waterproof kind-I find you can draw right on these without smearing. Always improving.
We had another problem on page 14; and I love the way Josh words things. He said that Sidekick in the last panel looked like a bald guy in front of a broom! [laughs] He was right. So I pulled his mohawk over to make it resting on his head! Two heads are better than one in this case and that's why collaboration is so important-you cannot see all your mistakes. Believe me I give Josh a run for his money on script stuff too! [By the way,] it's always Sidekick-one time I drew him and Josh said he looked like a hungover, deranged clown! He was spot on that time too. Poor Sidekick!
Ok let's look at page 9. Maxwell Murder just blew [the] dude's arm off with his Hellish tattoo powers. Josh thought everyone just looked too calm for just seeing their buddy get his arm blown off. I was working from experience-when I blew my hands apart with fireworks when I was 15 I calmly stood in the street more puzzled than anything. But this is drama not reality so I changed it to the more dramatic reaction.
Also in panel 3, Josh wanted a Grand Theft Auto style pose for the guy shooting Max. I concurred and complied:
Okay, page 4 was a splash page-my nemesis. I always feel like I'm wasting space for some reason. [The] script called for Hourglass
confronting Kinetic on the roof of his workplace where he had just dashed off to go do his superhero thing. I chose an overhead shot. I thought it was great. I thought wrong. Josh wanted a visible confrontation between Hourglass and Brian (Kinetic).
So I did a panel insert:
No, he wanted Kinetic's reaction. So I changed the insert:
"No no no, Kav I just don't like the whole thing-I want to see mostly Hourglass and nix on the overhead shot." So, I got
out another sheet of Bluline:
Now this was a keeper. I also decided that a rooftop scene should be rainy. Josh loved it.
Next I had a panel with weak facial shadowing which I self-corrected. Josh never knew about it.
And some really bad facial shadowing and likewise on the corrections:
Revisions are the final polish stage!
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A. KAVIRAJ: Kav is an artist, teacher, and biologist who lives in Sacramento, California. He is the artist forThe End of Paradise, Rapid City, and Dr Death vs The Zombie. He is the writer and artist for Dr. Death vs. The Vampire. E-mail: firstname.lastname@example.org
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